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Here’s a real-life example of what I do with email offers for wellness service providers:

BEFORE

Hi _____________,

First off, thank you so much for being open to trying a new experience with <product>. I’m genuinely excited to be able to share <product> with you and others.

The reason I’m emailing is, I’d like to extend the invitation to purchase a few <product> sessions at a discount. I’m calling it the In-House-Special and I’m only offering up a few to purchase. As you may have guessed these sessions will be out of my home, and yes, parking is included.

If you’ve been thinking you’d like to experience the <product> again and plunge into the freedom of your mind, shoot me a reply and I’ll get back to you right away with all of the details.

Thank you,

AFTER

Hi _____________ ,

First off, thank you so much for being open to trying the <product>. I’m beyond excited to be able to share it with you!

Which is why I’m emailing you today: I’d love to share it with you again, by inviting you to purchase a few <product> sessions at a reduced rate.

I’m calling it the In-House-Special because you guessed it: it’s in my home in <location> (and yes, parking is included.)

I’m only offering a few of these packages, so if you really enjoyed your experience and want to try it again, hit reply and let me know. I’ll get back to you with more details right away.

Thanks again _______________ ,

 

In this case, I made small yet effective changes. I tightened up the message and made it flow better, relieving my client’s stress load and making them super happy in the process:

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